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When I was 10 years old, I was moved to a new house. This house was very beautiful, and my room is beautiful, too!
When I opened the door, I could hardly believe what I saw. Had my wish come true? The room painted pink is my room! It is lighter and it also has a wide window from where you can see the mountains and a country landscape. It has a very big balcony with a view at the sea. There are many nice pictures hunging from the wall. In one side, there is a huge bed covered by a patchwork cover, and small lamp on the bedside table. There not only a table, a desk with a computer but alsao a TV. My guitar and the piano are in the corner of the room and there are many colour lights in the ceiling. There is a small white rug on the wooden floor and plenty of books are on the shelves opposite to the bed.
Thanked to my parents that building for me a nice room!
When I was 10 years old, I( was 1)moved to a new house. This house was very beautiful, and my room is beautiful, too!
When I opened the door, I could hardly believe what I saw. Had my wish come true? My room had been coloured by pink ! It is lighter and it also has a wide window from where you can see the mountains and a country landscape. It has a very big balcony with a view at the sea. There were many nice pictures hung on the wall. In one side, there is a huge bed covered by a patchwork cover, and small lamp on the bedside table. There not only a table, a desk with a computer but also a TV. My guitar and the piano were in the corner of the room and there were many beautiful colour lights on the ceiling. There was a small white rug on the wooden floor and plenty of books were on the shelves opposite to the bed.
I'm very grateful to my parrents that builded for me the best room ever that I never had before!
*: chú ý chia quá khứ như là câu đầu tiên, đã chia quá khứa là This house WAS beautiful rồi mà đoạn sau còn ns là my room IS beautiful nữa. còn câu I was moved là ko đc vì trong câu này chỉcần chia moved thôi chứ ko có was.
When I was 10 years old, I( was 1)moved to a new house. This house was very beautiful, and my room is beautiful, too!
When I opened the door, I could hardly believe what I saw. Had my wish come true? My room had been coloured by pink ! It is lighter and it also has a wide window from where you can see the mountains and a country landscape. It has a very big balcony with a view at the sea. There were many nice pictures hung on the wall. In one side, there is a huge bed covered by a patchwork cover, and small lamp on the bedside table. There not only a table, a desk with a computer but also a TV. My guitar and the piano were in the corner of the room and there were many beautiful colour lights on the ceiling. There was a small white rug on the wooden floor and plenty of books were on the shelves opposite to the bed.
I'm very grateful to my parrents that builded for me the best room ever that I never had before!
*: chú ý chia quá khứ như là câu đầu tiên, đã chia quá khứa là This house WAS beautiful rồi mà đoạn sau còn ns là my room is beautiful nữa. còn câu I was moved là ko đc vì trong câu này chỉcần chia moved thôi chứ ko có was.